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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 616
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    the window often stops when the motor slows down
    I find myself opening the door to the accomodate a hassle
    I trade one shade for another
    and my brain melts in this heat

    the desire lacks enthusiasm
    going forawrd but creeping through a road block

    priceless, unescapable beauty
    scenery
    saving grace
    a silver lining of gratitude
    that does not base its status on the weather or circumstance

    always something greener on the other side
    mistletoe on the side of hwy 72
    nothing to lose
    get out in this jam to get my kiss
    and arrive on time, someone's time,
    no matter the miles of traffic




    Submitted on 2013-02-16 11:14:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I sometimes suffer from cluttered states of mental traffic. If I slow down to contemplate it I am overwhelmed and can no longer see out the window, so to speak. Opening the door to accommodate the influx of ideas is usually a useless hassle. My brain seems to melt in the attempt.

    Fortunately I'm brought back to the actuality of my surroundings, the beauty of natures scenery that asks so little in return.

    "Always something greener" so I push on, hoping to get my kiss. Tenacity and perseverance are viable traits. They get you through those miles of traffic to arrive on time, "someones time"!

    I may have this all wrong but this gives me hope. A little bit abstractly presented but lots of fun nonetheless.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-04-24 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I read this. I find it to be lovely.
    | Posted on 2013-02-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      lines like
    "a silver lining of gratitude
    that does not base its status on the weather or circumstance"
    hold a deeper meaning than I think we will ever really know.

    Check for typos! I enjoyed the piece but it was a bit distracting that I don't think you proofread it.

    Also the opening line was a good catch!
    | Posted on 2013-02-16 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]


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