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    dots Submission Name: Comme tu veuxdots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 972
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 943



    Description:
       I'm horrible at translating, but you get the gist of it. It's much better in French :)


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    dotsComme tu veuxdots
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    c'est comme l'amour
    tout à fait compliqué
    quand il m'accuse des choses
    que je ne fais jamais, d'autrefois
    mes pensées roulent et roulent
    encore sur tout et de toi aussi
    une image de temps en temps
    une parole entre des amants
    qui n'ont pas encore confiance
    entre eux, dans l'âme consciente-
    des crimes commettent par l'esprit
    de mon coeur qui se senti
    vraiment des intentions bienveillantes

    this is like love
    quite complicated
    when he accuses me of things
    I never do, otherwise
    my thoughts run and roll
    again over eveything and of you too
    an image from time to time
    a word between lovers
    which have not yet trust
    between them in the conscious soul
    crimes committed by the spirit
    my heart that feels
    truly benevolent intentions




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    ||| Comments |||
      "between them in the conscious soul"..I like this line so much.
    Nice poem here and I wish I know French to compare this from the original. I also write better in my native language and have difficulty in translation. But I think you did a good job here..Thanks for sharing!

    Jen
    | Posted on 2013-02-26 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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