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The knowing

Author: DaleP
ASL Info:    57/M/TX
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Words: 202
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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The knowing

                    I am called to a vast distance
                    where love is wings and we fly
                    higher than ordinary dreams.
                    Yes we fly but first we must assail
                    the cliffs and they are ever so high.
                    But are they high enough to launch our love
                    into infinity?

                    I have heard it said that Love
                    is an occupation we grow into,
                    providing we have the fortitude
                    to persevere through the knowing.
                    I want to do that!

                    What human does not come with faults
                    and baggage? And why is it that I now
                    love you unconditionally? I did not
                    think this true a week ago.

                    In fact I imagined scenarios where
                    jealousy rumbled up out of the pit like
                    mad dogs and devoured my love
                    in howling fits.

                    However life is about growing and I would
                    prefer you whole and complete after having
                    experienced life to the point you no longer
                    wonder what it will take, to make you happy.
                    A time when you are comfortable
                    in the silence that is our dream
                    Our dream, that merely awaits
                    our knowing to shine with the moon and stars
                    as an inevitable part of nature should.

Submitted on 2013-02-21 21:25:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The charming picture reminded me that my simpleminded love for children, which makes me raise them and teach them and provide affection and is, well, just simpleminded, has been a lot easier to do and to live with and to understand than my loves for partners and grown-up kin and friends, etc.

Now that I'm quite old, I just treat everybody like children or like animals, whichever they most resemble. The only difference anybody has noticed is that I sometimes seem easier to get on with.

Maybe that is the same as your story in the poem? Maybe you are writing to everybody all at once except that this valentine gets the actual attention?

I don't think this is very good verse, but it is still an expressive and graceful text, albeit built out of clichés. But why not? You don't have the task of blowing my mind, just of living with your own. Please post more!

| Posted on 2013-02-24 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
  This is truly beautiful. I'm actually going to e-mail it to my wife, thanks.

| Posted on 2013-02-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah yes, as inevitable as transcendental ascension. You know how it gets me off when you appeal to my prurient instincts like that!!

| Posted on 2013-02-21 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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