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Needs No Name

Author: Snow9
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Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Needs No Name

-know the thing rushing through,
gushing and pouring
-locate your brother
in a pin drop light
-look darkness in the eyes
-know that I too
have a heart! & be able
-say “I’ll be there”
-feel even the void curved out
by the impossible past….

Then choke and fume with irritation
Or/and drown oneself in music….
While it,
I am all that I need to know….

Submitted on 2013-02-25 07:31:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the ambiguity of this, it gives a real sense of rushing emotion, a mixture - there's a real immediacy there.

I also like the effect of 'To' on its own to begin with. That pause kind of sets up a mood, it's like a preparation.

feel even the void curved out...that's a great line

Fine poem, yes.
| Posted on 2013-05-06 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]

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