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Sunset


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Sunset



Two palms of remnant light fade
With the meteor blaze
trailing off into the west,
this high pitched mountain trail,
crimson in the gathered mist.
Not really sure what I’m supposed to feel
And how to act upon it, the silent
Gladness at the midnight rain and me
Under the blankets.
This tasteful amaranth bud beckons
To lean into its whispering neck,
Pronounce the prophecies deceased, oh truly,
This must be the end of times.




Submitted on 2013-02-25 09:38:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I find this soothingly sensual like having the froth of frenzy sponged off then slipping into the aftermath of amazement.
| Posted on 2013-03-01 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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