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    dots Submission Name: She Did Not Know dots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I dedicate this to my sister...GOD USED YOU TO BRING ME TO HIM! NO ONE HAS EVER GIVEN A BETTER GIFT!


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    I dedicate my love for the love that was shown to me
    that maybe she didn't know,
    planted a seed
    Time casting shadows over prayers
    But they were never lost
    A heart that desperately cried that her words mattered
    A battle before her that couldn't be fought

    Along came the Grace,
    but she didn't see
    Hidden was his face
    but she couldn't believe

    Another day and after hours and her heart put so vulnerably out to dry
    all the pain another liar calling her a passerby

    Someone should tell her
    that love has grown
    watered with her tears and prayer
    a truth passed down that could have gone unknown
    now I will speak and hope that she see's
    the love for the love that she had for me




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      First line is grand. I enjoyed the rest.
    | Posted on 2013-04-30 00:00:00 | by CNPerry | [ Reply to This ]
      Love is the best thing to feel, it is the best thing to be around, love !!!
    Love is the heart showing how it feels, no one can tell you how to love no one can show you how to love, but to express love


    Is a nice read, very deep and full of emotions

    May you have sunny days with a smile, Underneath the moons light, I wish you the best


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    | Posted on 2013-03-16 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      planted a seed
    Time casting shadows over prayers
    But they were never lost


    this is beautiful.
    the whole piece is wonderful but these three lines captured my attention and took me on all kinds of adventures.

    i know a woman who has a son who deals and smokes drugs. the woman is a christian and she took her son to sunday school and learned all the stories and sang all the songs but one day he found drugs and liked them more.

    this woman prays DAILY for her son to stop the drugs and start believing in god again. she also prays that he wont be hurt or killed in any of his ventures.

    seeds have been planted.
    prayers have been prayed.
    answers have not eventuated yet.

    and i think that is what i see...
    someone who loves someone so much they want to help them out of their situation but have no idea how to. someone who wants that person to know that it is not in vain. that they are loved. that someone is thinking about them. that they do matter to someone.

    sometimes thats enough. sometimes thats all it takes for a person to turn their life around. but sometimes it takes a long time for this to be realised. and that is hard for the person standing by doing the loving and watching them self destruct.

    this really is a beautiful and moving piece.
    | Posted on 2013-03-08 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      I have one word for you...

    Beautiful.

    And moving.

    And genuine.

    Wait, that's more than one word...so be it!
    | Posted on 2013-03-01 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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