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    dots Submission Name: art vs. science.dots
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    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 912
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I wrote this a long, long time ago. Years ago. Unedited.
    No comments necessary.
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    dotsart vs. science.dots
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    My cells are alight with the thought of you
    Wrapped around in you
    szdgsd, I can't explain it.
    I want to be under you and over you
    and beside you and through you
    I just want you everywhere
    all over me
    and we can watch our atoms dissociate
    and react with each other
    We could feel our senses dissipate
    like a breath in the night air
    or maybe even let go.
    Just let go of each other
    If I could let go of the hands of
    my parents and walk on my own
    why can't I let go of you?
    Because it won't mean anything
    after tonight
    and the last night
    and the next night
    temporary feelings, heightened senses
    discovering the anatomy of another
    means nothing when you're a corpse
    and feeling no love
    no feeling
    let's do this:
    adagio, allegre, fortissimo, cut out
    the pianissimo,
    this time
    with [no] feeling.




    Submitted on 2013-02-26 01:04:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well u actaully write with feelings thats for sure.
    A thoughful play of the senses I would say.
    Keep up the good work.
    Regards jm
    | Posted on 2013-08-26 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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