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Love Is:


Author: Carosuel
ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
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Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I wrote this for my husband today, for our fourth wedding anniversary.


Love Is:



The words leaving your lips,
the velvet sweet of your kiss,
hearing your voice on a summertime breeze,
your mesmeric face being all that I see,
when I close my eyes and when I dream,
of you.

Love is sleeping curled against your back,
love is how your fire attracts,
engulfs,
thrills,
owns me.

You are my beloved and you are mine.
You are my god and your body, my shrine.
Forever together, steadfast we will stand.
and all of our foes or friends will clearly understand,
we are, and will always be, united by love
hand-in-hand.




Submitted on 2013-02-26 03:20:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  My favorite line is "you are my god and your body my shrine". This is a very well descripted line, I enjoyed the relative imagery. The rhyme brake was exalent, I myself love flow of a poem, but not a singsong uniformed piece. Thank you for posting, good read.
| Posted on 2013-03-21 00:00:00 | by Windigo | [ Reply to This ]
  love.

l is for the way you look at me.
o is for the only one i see.
v is very very extraordinary
e is even more than any one that you adore

love is all that i can give to you.


sorry. a little musical interlude but thats what was playing in my mind as i read your piece.

love.

such a personal thing and yet something us girls want to shout from the rooftops.

my husband is from a different culture than me and he doesnt understand that i like to be told i look good or he loves me or he needs me etc etc etc.
i explain to him thats what girls are like where im from... he looks at me bewildered and says "but you know my heart" and he is right.. i do know his heart.

but hearing it is even better.

so yes.
thank you for allowing us as readers to intrude in your love affair. i hope it ends well... whirlwind and fairytale like.
| Posted on 2013-03-08 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
  I like how this neatly rhymed well. It had a tight rhyme pattern in the beginning. the rest of it after the first break followed nicely afterwards. Well done!

Such a happy little poem. I myself love the topic of love but always to word it in such a sweet way you have.
| Posted on 2013-03-07 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]


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