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    dots Submission Name: Kiss Me In The Raindots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 328
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 816
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    Description:
       Another of those for my dear Nazz. Girls, even the most cynical of them, can feel a little sappy at times...


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    These sappy moments have become clichés
    That you look at in disdain
    And I hide within myself the desire
    To kiss you in the rain
    The token happy endings make you roll your eyes
    While I’m trying to hide the tears in mine
    Yes, I cry when love conquers all
    And I think that’s just fine.
    Yes, you are sweet and affectionate
    When you choose to be
    But sometimes a big romantic gesture
    Seems like the perfect thing to me

    Will you ever dance with me?
    Or kiss me in the rain?
    Yes, I know it’s silly
    And sometimes it seems insane
    Maybe the flowers and the teddy bears
    Have been done a million times
    And Valentine’s Day comes every year
    Cloaked in hearts and rhymes
    But that doesn’t mean I wouldn’t love
    A sappy gesture or two
    So whisper me a love song in the dark
    And I’ll do anything for you.

    A billion songs have been written,
    Some of them ridiculously uncool
    And if I tear up over corny lyrics
    You take me for a fool
    I can’t help it that my heart is moved
    By a love that says it will never end
    And there’s always something terribly beautiful
    In the romance between two friends
    Just walking hand in hand with you
    Is more romantic than it may seem
    But what about a candlelit dinner?
    Well, a girl can dream…

    Will you ever dance with me?
    Or kiss me in the rain?
    Put rose petals in my bubble bath,
    Draw our names in a heart on the window pane
    Will I ever see a ring in my glass,
    I have been waiting so very long.
    Will you ever declare me the girl of your dreams
    And dedicate to me our favorite song?
    Yes, I know it’s all a bit silly
    And you’ve said as much before
    But just kiss me underneath the mistletoe
    And I can only love you more.




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      I feel this piece can be a song with a beautiful lyrics. Good work.
    | Posted on 2013-03-07 00:00:00 | by Bang | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was written very well and I am proud of it. Its awesome that you have endurance in writing, I think it is a strength. Sometimes really lengthy pieces like this are so redundant I lose interest, I have to admit this one kept my attention, I thought the timing was great. :) Awesome! I am glad you shared it.

    Just walking hand in hand with you
    Is more romantic than it may seem
    But what about a candlelit dinner?
    Well, a girl can dream…

    I loved that part...it is longing, realistic, content. Very you.
    | Posted on 2013-03-05 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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