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    dots Submission Name: The loathing eyesdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1111
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    Description:
       To my dear sweet and cute candy who has always watched me with those eyes loathing at me at all times with utmost disgust for the past 1 year.


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    dotsThe loathing eyesdots
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    Oh how I wish to hold your cheeks in my hands and kiss your forehead.

    My Heart

    A shiver, a quiver in this dark place with nowhere to go,
    blinded by darkness falling in an endless sink hole.
    Losing myself to life with no meaning of pain or despair,
    A tear, what is it in an oblivion with no chains to bind.

    Oh how I wish I could remember how to dream, to live a life with you.

    My thoughts

    Shall I remove this face of mine with a manikin’s smile?
    Shall I show you the world with my eyes that yearns for a life?
    Shall I drown myself in a bliss called love?
    With my dream is where I wish to find happiness.

    Oh how I wish I could remember what happiness was.

    My reality

    How it pains me to watch you loath my existence,
    A curse, I am gifted with to live a life in a war.
    How it forces a tear in my sleepless night,
    A tear in my eyes for a question “What have I done wrong?”

    Oh how I wish you would shoulder my tears.

    My Life

    Walking past by time, walking past by you,
    I smile to live my time away.
    A paradox alive in this world as me,
    I wish though to see you smile from my shadow.




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