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    dots Submission Name: Broken Junkyarddots
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    Author: Specdro
    ASL Info:    28/Of Course/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 21/53/38
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 898
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 302



    Description:
       A co-worker broke his arm slowing down work, which is slowing down my income needed to achive my dream, I've broken another heart this week and in turn I have shattered the poor girls self esteem, my pockets are broke, my body is getting older, I have scattered and confusing thoughts... ect. I was just venting and thought I would post it just to keep it. Not much editing time put into it, I only spend about 10 minutes on this.


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    dotsBroken Junkyarddots
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    Broken arms and broken dreams
    broken hearts and broken self esteem.
    Broken pockets and broken parts,
    Broken arrows and broken thoughts
    Broken teeth and broke down cars.

    I've made this place my broken home,
    I've made this broken place my tome.




    Submitted on 2013-03-05 13:18:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sometimes theres a reason for these things.
    sometimes everything is broken but somehow its all fixed too.
    sometimes life works out in riddles you cannot fathom until youre well out the other end.

    do not give up.
    there is beauty to be found in brokeness if you allow yourself to open your eyes...

    tome? is this meant to read tomb?
    you dont want to kill yourself off too soon...
    try find a different point of view in the brokenness...
    | Posted on 2013-03-11 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      Your turn out is about worth the effort you through into it which says more than you think if it was only 10 minutes. The writing reminds me of a simple way to keep practice up on the go.

    If you wanted to add more substance just repeat the pattern with different rhymes.
    | Posted on 2013-03-09 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]


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