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    dots Submission Name: Blasphemy IIdots

    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
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    dotsBlasphemy IIdots

    Dear God,
    They have silenced the chimes of our temple
    Where you and I often played
    The music their gods forbid.
    They have broken my flute into two
    And now we are no longer one.
    They have unleashed a bearded ghost
    That claims to wear your shroud
    It holds a green gun across a bleached sun
    And tells me lies about you:
    You hate idol-worshipers and infidels
    But I am an infidel too!

    Send me your angels; send me a cloud or two
    So we may play the orchestra
    Of blasphemy II

    Submitted on 2013-03-09 14:46:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really actually liked this poem, very creative and very imaginative. I am agnostic but we all pray to some God for help and how you asked for it was nicely done. good job and keep up the creative work ;0)
    | Posted on 2013-03-11 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this.
    it conjures up many things for me.

    the first being the need to worship god in secret in a foreign land. meaning the writer of this piece has converted to a religion that isnt "accepted" in the land they live in. meaning their idea of god and the those around thems idea of god are quite different. meaning their approach to interacting with god and those around them are quite different.

    its interesting.
    in some countries you can be killed for disowning the religion you were born into.
    in some countries your family will disown you because you bring shame to the family name.

    in my country no one cares.

    what i also find interesting is how it relates to my personal faith story.
    i have always been protestant and i have always been very relaxed in my interaction with god.
    then i married a man from a much more rigid christian background... some people found it offensive i would think of marrying him because with all his ritual and incense he couldnt possibly know god or have recieved salvation and yet i have learnt so much more about god while going to these services which are so foreign yet so beautiful to me.
    but i do feel left out. i do feel like i dont belong. i do want to burst out into song instead of the droning monotone almost chant like responses throughout the service.

    is it really blasphemy if its not the "accepted" way of interacting with god?
    | Posted on 2013-03-11 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]

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