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    dots Submission Name: The Nightdots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Nightdots
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    Last night wasn't like tonight
    And tonight isn't like last night
    The stars aren't as bright
    But the clouds make it just right

    In the night I shiver from the cold
    The lingering breeze through my open window
    A night for someone to hold
    As I lay my head on my pillow

    Dark outside, silence throughout my town
    Just the lights, cars, just a beautiful sight
    Waiting for an adventure, in the night.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh how I relate to this poem. You’ve described so many of my sleepless nights so perfectly! I hope that was your goal.

    I was also reading through your Red Rain series and couldn’t help but laugh when I saw they started with waking up from a nights rest. I began to wonder if perhaps we shouldn’t just wait for adventure after-all.

    You’re poem employs simple language to paint a serene picture. However, provides little more depth to understanding the human experience. That isn’t exactly wrong, as long as it was intentional. Was it?
    | Posted on 2013-05-09 00:00:00 | by Erreur | [ Reply to This ]


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