This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Under Pressure

Author: DaleP
ASL Info:    57/M/TX
Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 632 /554 /330
Words: 152
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1835
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 1012


Under Pressure

My hearts desire is written larger than the
Death throws of the moon's mythic glow
Frozen and shattered by rampaging Frost giants
Collected and scattered by ravens
Only to be forgotten and left to trail
Across the sky like burning carbon
Meteorites marking the highway of dreams.
I am still trying to stay the course as the heat
Reaches a critical build.


Are much more than a temporary flight of fancy.
Definitely an out of control downhill plunge
Into the mantle of the earth.
Will I survive to find your

Will the pureness of pressure
Coalesce me to crystal?
Subsumed into the nothing of all.

I sizzle inside the drenching fire-form of every
Moment in my mercurial existence since I have
Begun the experience
That can only now be defined as,


Submitted on 2013-03-11 23:18:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  Wow. I have not read anything like this! Purely spectacular! I absolutely find this at utmost perfection!

| Posted on 2013-03-17 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  First of all, I really like the format, gives more emphasis on certain points and makes it more crisp. I know where you are going here and it takes me there too. This is one of those poems I found that questions yet directs the reader to understanding. By saying that, I think this is quite an amazing poem.
| Posted on 2013-03-16 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?