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    dots Submission Name: Under Pressuredots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsUnder Pressuredots
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    My hearts desire is written larger than the
    Death throws of the moon's mythic glow
    Frozen and shattered by rampaging Frost giants
    Collected and scattered by ravens
    Only to be forgotten and left to trail
    Across the sky like burning carbon
    Meteorites marking the highway of dreams.
    I am still trying to stay the course as the heat
    Reaches a critical build.

    You

    Are much more than a temporary flight of fancy.
    Definitely an out of control downhill plunge
    Into the mantle of the earth.
    Will I survive to find your
    Core?

    Will the pureness of pressure
    Coalesce me to crystal?
    Or
    Will
    I
    Be
    Subsumed into the nothing of all.

    I sizzle inside the drenching fire-form of every
    Moment in my mercurial existence since I have
    Begun the experience
    That can only now be defined as,

    Us.




    Submitted on 2013-03-11 23:18:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I have not read anything like this! Purely spectacular! I absolutely find this at utmost perfection!

    Fana
    | Posted on 2013-03-17 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all, I really like the format, gives more emphasis on certain points and makes it more crisp. I know where you are going here and it takes me there too. This is one of those poems I found that questions yet directs the reader to understanding. By saying that, I think this is quite an amazing poem.
    | Posted on 2013-03-16 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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