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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       came out from nowhere
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    fairytales had long lost their touch
    when from their vow she swayed
    for a little girls happily-ever-after dream
    shattered the next day

    begging for a little love
    from someone who couldn't stay
    oh she lost her other half
    to vices on display

    but was it cupid's childish trick
    for she met a guy one day
    when all she had were doubts and fears
    he took them all away

    they had loved so secretly
    stealing kisses here and there
    oh how it felt so dang silly
    keeping a secret affair

    they went on it like rabbits
    she didn't want to stop
    but parting was an option
    from coming, could not be stopped

    so she cherished every moment
    hoping time would still
    at every touch and taste
    crumbled her weak will

    but he could not hold on no more
    then to her dismay
    said the words, let her go
    for a new love he adored

    in the end the girl was back
    with fresh, unhealed wounds
    but that chance she'd still partake
    for he, her favorite mistake

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      This is so sad people are always falling for the one who leaves them I never have figured that one out but I really wish your secret love had stuck around for you
    | Posted on 2013-03-13 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! you're an amazing writer first off! The flow was perfect, you're style is very tailored and precise. Great write thank you.
    | Posted on 2013-03-13 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]

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