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    dots Submission Name: Shadowdots
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    Author: Bang
    ASL Info:    38/F/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 21/24/16
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    The sky darkened like a cigarette smoke of clouds.
    The sound of pouring rain just pounding on my window pane.

    I felt a sudden pain of the ships over the sea, as I looked vague disturbing with the strangers in the rain.

    This day just a blur and full of obscure. My silhouettes of idea of where I am; I wish I could draw a rainbow in the sky; I wish I could shine brightly like the sun through the clouds.




    Submitted on 2013-03-12 21:29:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      to keep it simple I often wish I could be that bright light that shines in the dark or could over come the shadow. That's one reason I love the Sun so much. Big . Bright. Warm.

    "This day just a blur and full of obscure. My silhouettes of idea of where I am; I wish I could draw a rainbow in the sky; I wish I could shine brightly like the sun through the clouds."

    my favorite part. well blended and even interesting word choices. Cool!
    | Posted on 2013-03-20 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very neat piece... I love how it's simple yet it's complex it is- and took me to the place you're portraying quickly in my mind. Thanks!
    | Posted on 2013-03-13 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]


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