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The sky darkened like a cigarette smoke of clouds.
The sound of pouring rain just pounding on my window pane.
I felt a sudden pain of the ships over the sea, as I looked vague disturbing with the strangers in the rain.
This day just a blur and full of obscure. My silhouettes of idea of where I am; I wish I could draw a rainbow in the sky; I wish I could shine brightly like the sun through the clouds.
Submitted on 2013-03-12 21:29:53
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to keep it simple I often wish I could be that bright light that shines in the dark or could over come the shadow. That's one reason I love the Sun so much. Big . Bright. Warm.
"This day just a blur and full of obscure. My silhouettes of idea of where I am; I wish I could draw a rainbow in the sky; I wish I could shine brightly like the sun through the clouds."
my favorite part. well blended and even interesting word choices. Cool!
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This was a very neat piece... I love how it's simple yet it's complex it is- and took me to the place you're portraying quickly in my mind. Thanks!
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