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    dots Submission Name: Lady Whitedots
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    Author: Windigo
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 6/13/13
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       It's a wedding poem! Hope you enjoy it.


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    dotsLady Whitedots
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    Glacier white, freedom free, beauty to the bone.
    Innocence or faded. . .what is the color of your soul?

    For endless years,
    A plea, a prayer, a promise
    To let the sunset successes fill your dress.

    Turn what is new to red and blue,
    For there, then, and that
    Is the start of suns and skies.

    The beginning of you two.
    Anywhere, when, and how
    Never live too far apart.

    No whisper is wasted if it's a thought from either of one of you.

    For now this day becomes
    One and one is two, simple markings glint upon ones finger through and through.

    When you go walking hand in hand,
    Out and in the world,
    Don't forget how you met
    And the things you both went through.

    Perchance a time will come when colors dry dull to grey
    Just remember that one summer.

    Glacier white, and freedom free, and beauty to the bone.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Really, really great. It's very refreshing to read this piece, it's got such a calculated ease and the word play is just outstanding.

    The line that speaks to me the most is, "Innocence or faded. . .what is the color of your soul?" although I felt that it didn't fit the poem. It's a beautiful line, really don't get me wrong, but I felt there was a tinge of cynicism that didn't fit the flavor of the rest of it.

    Just my opinion though and like I said that's the one line that REALLY stood out and touched me, so who knows?

    I will definitely be reading more of your work.
    --Carrie.
    | Posted on 2013-03-25 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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