Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Red Rain: Awakeningdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 857
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 768



    Description:
       Red Rain: Awakening (Red Rain: Anthology Part I)
    Horror Poem Anthology


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsRed Rain: Awakeningdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I awaken to the blood pouring down my hands, an endless velvet stream as I yell in despair, as I can’t phantom what the fuck is going on? Red flashes of lights outside my window yet reflects its anger beam in my house, enhancing the dramatic scene already I have awoken to. My lover is not at my side as I sit up from bed, and clear my head on what is going on. Strong I tried to be, me not understanding where this blood is pouring from, I find no wound, no scar, and no body. I grab the doorknob but it won’t open, my blood filled hands made it slippery for me to grasp. At last, at last the door is opened, bright lights in the hallway night, shines on my face blinding me from every angle, every place. They yell, raise your hand… raise your mother-fucking hands…




    Submitted on 2013-03-14 21:41:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      
    | Posted on 2013-05-09 00:00:00 | by Erreur | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    197044

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Fasade written by jackz
    Giving written by jjd
    Summer written by layDsayD
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Push written by JanePlane
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    One Day written by WriteSomething
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    The Promise written by annie0888

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry