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    dots Submission Name: Blind to it alldots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 62/87/67
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       i have not gotten to the grammar yet so please don't comment on the grammer yet pls


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    dotsBlind to it alldots
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    tensions are thick
    my chest is tight
    i am starving for death
    waiting on the verge of a fight
    and i
    me
    you can only see
    the mask i so wear
    i play my parts
    easily
    and i'm
    finding my search
    never ending I'm
    so ready
    to lose
    so used to it
    anyways
    but this fire rushes
    and burns my viens
    inside my mouth
    this bitten toungue bleeds
    and stains
    and this invisible me
    stands to my side
    waves her hand in my face
    another mask of sweet lies
    but it's heavy and sags
    you see me peeking out
    this disgusting of something
    the true monster inside
    oh i
    yes me
    can you see my mangled self
    though my eyes
    still alive
    my face is the suffer i've felt
    yet my
    yes me
    that invisible self
    stands beside me
    always willing to help
    cuts my strings of your world
    and watches me fall
    into the void below us
    the silence i've longed
    forever falling
    and falling
    blind to it all




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      Very passionate and figurative free verse, I like its poetry even though personally I have a much happier attitude than this.

    But I reckon you shouldn't worry about the grammar because even if you never did the Engloish course or whatever, the way you speak and write is full of grammar anyway, maybe the kind people ought to notice more ...
    | Posted on 2013-03-17 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      i went through a phase of writing about masks.
    i guess its inevitable since somehow we all have one...

    sometimes i look at myself now and at how i used to be and wonder how i got to where i am. wonder why i dont feel as genuine as i used to. wonder whether life is the same for others or whether im in a dysfunctional rut that cannot be put into words.

    masks are fascinating things that cause us to refrain from being individuals because we think thats not what every one wants to see us as.

    who cares what other people think?

    i dont quite understand posting something that you know isnt polished. it seems odd to me to want to share something that you know isnt complete. grammar and punctuation can change the way words sit on pages and impact with which they are delivered.

    but maybe thats just me.

    | Posted on 2013-03-16 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]


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