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    dots Submission Name: Investmentdots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1207
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsInvestmentdots
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    Something about you,
    Invites me in,
    Excites me from within,
    Captivates each and every pore of my skin,
    Everytime I learn of this,
    Fasination doesn't even begin,
    To provide explaination to why,
    Making my head spin & spin,
    Butterflies swirling and twirling within,
    Little school girl giggling,
    Don't want to let go,
    Desiring only,
    To breathe you in,
    Experience all that you exude,
    I implore the naked you,
    Desiring more truth with sin,
    Plain to see,
    Like day,
    Your like a fine wine,
    With time,
    The more you show,
    More appealing you grow and grow,
    Assuming you are best to taste,
    Investments aren't great
    THere like bets,
    Yet I want every color, fascite and hue,
    Worth a million to life,
    Guess your worth the gamble,
    I'll take




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