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    dots Submission Name: Mirrordots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMirrordots
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    You value the golden cord
    encircled to fit a finger
    a woman’s love coverlet
    a rare tale relinquished
    with a tin of roses
    faint and unconscious
    but ignore the seasons I touch
    a blank shelf of time
    I thought my skin will learn again.

    I still think of you
    in the most subtle way a leaf can fall
    on a slightly eroded ground.
    Outside, the fog hangs
    heavy with my overripe flesh casting
    down to gravity.
    I feel the pull of goodbye
    weighing like a cut of paper
    from your absence.

    By every curve of the leg, every trace of my gnarled fingers
    I watch my face
    become yours.




    Submitted on 2013-03-16 02:37:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I felt a push and pull on this one. As a reader I noticed you want to expand yet hold some back. There are some delicate lines here-so sweet and lovely yet you managed to inflict pain in it somehow mixed it up.
    This poem wanted relatedness..catch you and settles in. I felt also a bit sad while reading your works like this one but there's something peaceful to it after reading. Maybe what I want to say is I really like this piece. Just thoughts..
    | Posted on 2013-03-26 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      Where does the importance lie in
    the forming of a relationship?
    Does a man long only for a trophy and
    status without truly knowing the
    innerheart of his mate?
    Is it in the reflection of each individual's mind
    or ego's eye, as it reflects back
    unto itself what it desires? Yet do we
    really see one another?
    What is a woman in the eyes
    of a man? Does she see a reflection of his view?
    Does he see one of hers? Is there to come a point when
    regardless of intent time will merge this union
    into a single reflection? `
    I watch my face become yours may not
    always be the answer but I think if it comes
    because of shared growth and experience as
    partners in life then perhaps it is
    one of the better ones.

    | Posted on 2013-03-16 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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