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    dots Submission Name: Extended releasedots

    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsExtended releasedots

    We talked about it, we really did
    as we stayed up, high,
    letting the absence of sleep dissolve like tiny crystals within the stomachs of the well rested

    we spoke of the challenge of opening up,
    and spilling
    and collecting, stitching,
    and moving on.

    And within these walls I am at ease.
    More familiar than my own room.
    But then...then the foreignness grabbed at me and whispered me into comfort--
    a strange comfort.
    Definitely not at ease

    But at least we talked about it and I felt a lot better.
    I also felt well rested.
    A little too well rested as the absence of adventure could not dissolve within the stomachs of the weary.
    Definitely not like tiny crystals, anyways.

    I left.
    Frequently returning to the location;
    never returning to the feeling.
    Until now.
    Now, I'm not all too sure what happened.
    Just that we were high,
    and we talked about it.

    Submitted on 2013-03-19 12:31:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really love this.

    i love the way you book end the piece with we stayed up and we talked about it.
    the way you create the highness in the piece because you sort of drift and address things but you dont address them so at the end im convinced i was there and i was high and yeah... we talked about it but i cant remember if we got anywhere.


    i wish i had more feedback but i just cannot get past how much i love this piece.

    great job!
    | Posted on 2013-03-19 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]

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