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    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/90
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    When we get old
    we're going to meet.
    Meet like it's the first time.
    We'll fall in love
    all over again.

    You'll be interesting,
    I'll be loyal.
    You'll relive
    your vagabond life.
    I'll tell you what I accomplished.
    Still working hard to prove
    everyone
    wrong.

    But if all I can give you
    is my old age,
    my old friend,
    I hope you'll take it.
    And be content.

    I could never make you
    content.

    I have such silly dreams.
    Silly ideals.
    They tease me at work.
    But you knew me.
    I want to know you.

    I want to know of how
    you've triumphed,
    over your own heart.
    I want to know what
    it's like to see you again
    for the first time.

    You'll be interesting.
    I'll be loyal.
    You'll be the world.
    I'll be something that
    tried to be better
    than her predecessor.

    I never held you to
    the world's standard.
    I just wanted you to be
    content.
    Happy.
    To know you are loved by
    all
    who meet you.




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      at first i thought this piece was about dementia or Alzheimers... you'll be interesting; ill be loyal... reminds me of working in the resthome and seeing a resident with dementia sitting with her husband who was still of sound mind... she prattled away about their life without realising that he was the one she loved way back when...

    and then i got to thinking that actually this piece could be about the one that got away. not got away in a bad sense but in a too-hard-to-contain-so-i-let-you-go-off-into-the-world kind of way...
    knowing that one day you'll be reunited. that one day he will come back and tell you of all his adventures and you will tell him of what it would have been to stay... the best of both worlds...

    i cannot put my finger on it.

    i love your way with words.
    i hope you dont mind my vaguely useless comments on your words. but i really enjoy all the different directions they take me and the way you capture human relationship so well within your pieces.
    | Posted on 2013-03-22 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      I like constructive moving on if that's the heart that you put finger to keyboard with. I also like your certainty that the older we get the wiser we get. Most of all I like your devotion to love - not just in a selfish way - as the last line seems to suggest. Thanks for the read!
    | Posted on 2013-03-22 00:00:00 | by strike three | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought i was getting it until the end
    (To know you are loved by
    all
    who meet you.)
    And Now I am just lost
    | Posted on 2013-03-20 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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