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    dots Submission Name: Thank Youdots
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    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/90
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThank Youdots
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    I never got the chance
    to say thank you,
    for slamming that door in my face.
    When I needed you.

    I never uttered the words,
    as you set me off
    where you wouldn't have to
    look at your mistake.

    I never got the chance
    to say thanks for recognizing
    that my dad's mom had money,
    money that you
    wanted to be apart of.

    I never said how appreciative
    that i was for using me to
    marry into that.

    I recognize now how truly
    grateful I am for you
    sending me far away
    from you.

    Best thing you could have done
    for me.




    Submitted on 2013-03-20 01:56:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its interesting how in this case there are plenty of things you never did or said...

    somethings are better left alone... you know?

    if this is written from personal experience i am sorry. no one deserves to be used by another human being in any way. ever.
    especially not when it comes to money.
    though money will make many people do things that they ought not be proud of.

    but it sounds to me like theyve done good by you in the end. it sounds to me like you never noticed things to be the way they were until it was well over.
    and because you hadnt recognized the situation for what it was you were unable to see the person for who they were...

    having doors slammed in your face hurts but once you are able to step back from said door and look around you can see the whole wall and not just the door. the wall covered in broken glass and barbed wire to keep you out; that serves as a warning that you are not welcome..

    sometimes we just dont want to see any of this.
    sometimes we WANT love to be blind.

    but yes. youre right. it was the best possible outcome given the cards played.
    | Posted on 2013-03-22 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      'apart of' ??
    I wish you could have let this out without the anger. Inspite of the acceptance on the first lines of stanzas, the last line points a finger. It seems the struggle has not died. I like the way you write. I've got something similar; read 'Today I finally did it' when you get a min.
    | Posted on 2013-03-22 00:00:00 | by strike three | [ Reply to This ]


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