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    dots Submission Name: In Giving Updots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsIn Giving Updots
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    When the world falls around you,
    And the lights are shut off in your life..
    There seems to be learned helplessness,
    That is so severe, it threatens mortality.

    Emotions so systemic,
    A dream that is so hard to be attained..
    The threat of loss...
    The dealings with loss...

    The carelessness, and apathy,
    The tensions that eat at me alive,
    To awake in this broken cold home,
    And know that no one is there...

    Today I lost my car,
    I lost my job,
    I lost my home...
    I have never felt so alone...

    No hand to hold onto,
    No happy ending..
    No one by my side...
    This suffering has to end.

    I don't want to be here anymore,
    I do not desire to keep fighting for failure,
    I desire to be burried,
    I desire to end myself...

    The essence of my weak life




    Submitted on 2013-03-20 17:52:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Today I lost my car,
    I lost my job,
    I lost my home...

    actually? because if so i am so sorry!
    if i lived closer i'd let you crash at mine but alas... whole other countries and all of that.

    sometimes life caves in. sometimes the bottom drops out of it and we feel like we are falling falling falling though we never know a) what we're falling into and b) when the fall ends.

    i pray the end of the fall is soon for you and i just hope that it is a much better ending than the promise in your piece.

    youve battled your way through every obstacle and hardship that has come your way... it'd be a shame to throw in the towel now.

    maybe just find somewhere safe you can sit the next round out... somewhere safe to regroup... to plan a new offence?

    good luck and stay safe.
    | Posted on 2013-03-21 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      Definitely a poem that lives up to your Nom de plume
    I feel ever so much more depressed than I did just a minute ago
    | Posted on 2013-03-20 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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