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    dots Submission Name: march 19th 2013dots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 305
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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    Description:
       i wrote this on march 21st about the events of the other day. my grief, while freshest, sometimes serves the best creativity, the best heart. we love you, baby angel


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    from the moment i found out, i knew something was wrong
    you were different from your sisters with no doubt
    the doctor kept close tabs on you to make sure you were good
    but even this did not stop God's original plan

    they said you were nine weeks, but they couldn't find you there
    the doctor agreed things were amiss
    after a week of taking tests and calling the doctor back and forth,
    your time had come before your first breath

    i hadn't gotten sick, but my tummy ached with stretching
    my body was preparing as your house
    i had a funny feeling that you wouldn't be here long
    that i would not meet you on earth

    i called the doctor up when it started to change
    he said i was okay, that it was normal
    but it didn't get better, it only got worse
    and so i went to find out what was wrong

    they told me you were there, fighting for your life
    they said it was a strange happening
    they didn't find you were you'd be because you weren't there
    and that was why things looked abnormal to me

    i went the next morning to follow up with doctor
    he said he'd never seen this before
    the report from the er was very disconcerting
    and it seemed that you weren't meant to win this war

    one final test to confirm the terrible news
    there was no longer any doubt
    no more would i ride the emotional roller coaster
    i could be at peace knowing you were, too

    no longer with us, you never met us, you never took a breath
    but still we love you as our child
    march 19th, 2013, the day i lost my baby
    and forever i will love you the same




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      im really sorry to read this.
    i think writing from an intense place of grief can be a good thing as you said in your description... i know writing has helped me through some of the ugliest moments of my life.

    i pray that you have plenty of people around you who love you and will support you. they may not fully understand how you feel or what you are going through but they want to be there for you.

    take care and be kind to yourself and your body... youve been through a lot.
    xx
    | Posted on 2013-03-23 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      Hang in there girl. when i read this i came the closest to fainting in my entire life.
    Just know that family is always there for u.
    | Posted on 2013-03-21 00:00:00 | by EragonaElven | [ Reply to This ]


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