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    dots Submission Name: What Am I?dots
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    Author: Windigo
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 6/13/13
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
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    dotsWhat Am I?dots
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    Shimmered white, ghostly long,
    hog eyed blind in eerie mist.
    Gothic black with bending shadows hide and melt to unseen narrows. Hidden light rid the phamtons of the night, Go crazy at its sight.

    Do you know I mirror reflection?
    Turn little day for time to think, will this ever be the same?
    Will you know across the grove that I in white will come?




    Submitted on 2013-03-21 14:36:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      After reading this a couple of times I'm not sure what you are alluding to, though once pointed out I'm sure it will be quite clear. Great use of descriptive words though, I get the feeling you used great care in choosing the correct words. You got across a feel and tempo to the read which isn't an easy task.
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2013-03-28 00:00:00 | by graeme | [ Reply to This ]


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