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    dots Submission Name: Tiny Leaves in the Raindots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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    dotsTiny Leaves in the Raindots
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    Twinkle tiny leaves.
    You canít catch the rain, donít cry.
    He is in your veins.




    Submitted on 2013-03-23 07:58:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as i sit here staring at your words, i can't help but think of things in my past.....it hits the reader deeply and forces them to face those times when they stood in the rain feeling pained with loss.....and you did it with three simple lines. i love it.
    | Posted on 2013-04-01 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... Makes me think of a boy that just lost his father or someone loosing someone very dear. Then another more bolder wiser person giving comfort, telling them there in no use in crying over something you think has been lost. It's right here, in your "venis". You never really were alone. Good read, thanks for posting.
    | Posted on 2013-03-26 00:00:00 | by Windigo | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and sweet definitely I'm left wondering though...
    Leaves with veins?
    Who is in these veins?

    I think a little more content would be very nice..
    | Posted on 2013-03-25 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]


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