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    dots Submission Name: tonight i will not love youdots
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    Author: love_confusion
    ASL Info:    20/f/ct
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 10/53/57
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 633
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    Tonight I will not love you.
    I will consume myself with the poisons of alcohol
    Your memory will be forgotten in the tearing of my skin
    & when the blood flows, all my attention will be focused on it
    So tonight I will not love you.
    For you do not deserve my love
    I will be so drunk and bitter, that your name wont cross my mind
    No, tonight I will not love you.
    I cant do this anymore
    My love for you is so strong
    But I can no longer hold the rope
    Tonight I will not love you
    That maybe a lie
    But there will be a night
    Where you no longer
    Cross my mind.




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      Even though this isn't the usual style of poem that I like, I still enjoy it. The repetition reminds me of drunken babbling, sort of like someone with too many drinks in them muttering a mantra to themselves. I feel a tone of desperation underneath it all which gives it more depth.

    My only problem is that the 'maybe' in the thirteenth line should be 'may be'. Other than that, thanks for sharing this good piece!
    | Posted on 2013-04-01 00:00:00 | by KotaNashi | [ Reply to This ]
      You really make me feel this the agony
    And ache comes through and I just want
    To scream and bleed with you
    | Posted on 2013-03-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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