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    dots Submission Name: Misconceptions dots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 561
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1274



    Description:
       About a woman's hesitancy toward males until she's enlightened.


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    dotsMisconceptions dots
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    A wounded soul
    who's lost all faith in men
    is on the verge of swearing
    them off, but then

    steps into fascination
    with someone new presented,
    who makes her question
    this species she's resented.

    How is it that so many
    possess this cruel role
    in which their only objective
    is to gain all control

    over the women they "love"
    and seek to break them down?
    Left without self-confidence,
    they begin to drown

    in a world of self-loathing
    and succumb to submission;
    afraid to make a move
    without his permission.

    But then comes this man,
    alien to what she's known.
    She's baffled because
    all that he has shown

    is courtesy and kindness
    laced with sincere respect,
    a down right gentleman
    and nothing you'd expect.

    He fills her full of life,
    puts love back in her heart,
    gives her everything
    she should've got from the start.

    This angel redeems men
    from common misconception,
    and serves as solid proof
    that there are rare exceptions.




    Submitted on 2013-03-25 01:23:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Everything is absolutely perfect in my point of view, the idea is laid down clearly and your way of describing is right on the spot. Though one of the last lines

    "she should've got from the start."

    I believe it would've been better as *gotten, however it still works when you read it over, just a tip.
    Thank you so much for sharing, this was awesome to read.
    | Posted on 2013-04-02 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sweet it's totally unbelievable but very
    Sweet
    | Posted on 2013-03-25 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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