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wind chill


Author: OneDarkFlame92
ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 461 /425 /227
Words: 29
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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wind chill



I've never been in love,
the same way Florida has never experienced Winter

but im walking to that place we used to go,
and im really fucking cold.




Submitted on 2013-03-26 20:24:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Never? That's a long word isn't it? When in denial (da Nile), go with the flow. Yeah, lot's of punch here.
| Posted on 2013-03-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  i dont know if i can remember four lines of words totalling 28 words to have EVER packed that much punch.

i really have nothing to say because youve sealed this piece up so well...

maybe its time for a redefinition of love?
| Posted on 2013-03-28 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
  First off I have to wonder if that place is in Florida
And are algators invoved if so is this never in love with
Person still alive?
| Posted on 2013-03-27 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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