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    dots Submission Name: more beddybyelanddots
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    Author: darkfeathers
    ASL Info:    19/female/beddybyeland
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 4/2/10
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Prose/Depressed
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    Beddybyland is where i live
    and here is but a dream
    nothing worth effort nothing worth living
    nothing to help me get over

    beddybyland is where i roam
    alone and with not one sound
    i know i breath, but i can't hear it
    my heart beats, but i can't listen to it
    beddybyland is where i wander

    seeing a vast land with nothing and no one
    i wander alone with only words for company
    but i can't hear them really
    i say them and speak them
    and see my breath in the cold
    this atmosphere is dense heavy hard
    i don't know where i've been
    i don't know where i'm going
    i don't know where i'm at.

    but i'm here, because if i wasn't
    where would i be.
    if i'm not here what does that mean.




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