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    dots Submission Name: Y U R An Xdots
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    Author: EmptyBox
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 76/64/31
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
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    I would have laid my 8 on the table sideways
    just for you, and said NO to all other chances
    (both negative and positive) if you had offered
    hope of a perfect circle anywhere in the future
    of our grid-locked relationship.

    Instead, you took a seeming random direction
    to points I hadn't charted, swinging unpredictably
    through every straight path I made, playing out
    your break-ups and make-ups and break-ups
    until the loops became predictable.

    I finally did the math and realized, you were never
    focused or repentive, nor was it a case of confusion
    or cold-feet that caused you to fuck up my life.
    You call yourself a "real man," but all you are
    is a goddamn parabola.





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    ||| Comments |||
      More like a trapezoid. So how did this listless asymptotical pirate manage to snare you in the first place. You should have noticed it was all hype. As for the 25 lb. square egg sideways I can really appreciate your wit here!! 888888 Ha ha !! Get down, find someone new.....

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-03-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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