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    dots Submission Name: abstract solacedots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 583
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1190



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    dotsabstract solacedots
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    Picture me
              dust
              smoke
              sky
              light
    striking the trees to make a shadow

    or

    a distant sea
    calling for your deep self to me

    I am a possibility
    who must become
    I trust
    I paced down the waters
    and saw your tears
    Here
              comes no ship
              no you
    I became a driftwood

    If this ends
              the silence
              the absence
    which only knows the meaning of this space
    between us
    There is still the tenderness of your eyes
    which is perhaps the oldest, warmest
    and the best thing I'll remember
    as if I were dead or
    asleep.




    Submitted on 2013-03-30 22:46:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The format is perfect for this piece. This is pure perfection. Keep writing

    --Tom
    | Posted on 2013-04-18 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      To sleep perchance to dream of A love beyond mere immortal tale. Where does my love rest waiting. Does her breast
    contain a caged bird fluttering to fly free beside me.
    Will we ever soar the warm air rising above emerald sea.
    I languish between heartbeats there is no time here to
    measure only the dull weight of eternity waiting for you
    waiting for our next flight to be the one nonstop rendezvous
    in
    forever land
    | Posted on 2013-03-30 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely and haunting I like the formatting it
    adds nuance and gravitas to an already exceptional
    write.



    Picture me
    dust
    smoke
    sky
    light
    striking the trees to make a shadow

    or

    a distant sea
    calling your deep self to me

    I am a possibility
    who must become
    I trust
    I pace along the waters
    and see your tears
    Here
    comes no ship
    no you
    I become driftwood

    If this ends
    the silence
    the absence
    which only knows the meaning of this space
    between us
    There is still the tenderness of your eyes
    which is perhaps the oldest, warmest
    and the best thing I'll remember
    as if I were dead or
    asleep.
    | Posted on 2013-03-30 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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