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    dots Submission Name: entwineddots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    In a world
    where a flower buds
    as if watching life,

    I am,

    a withering bloom
    as you blink
    at every promise
    failing and forgotten
    in time
    windswept and moving.

    You are,

    the crescent moon
    in my heartís night sky
    becoming round and full
    glowing with every woken dream.

    We dive

    into a lake of tears;
    a miniscule glimmer
    in the swirls of the milky way
    to be loved and lost

    streaming and

    Submitted on 2013-04-02 07:34:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We diveinto a lake of tears;
    a miniscule glimmer
    in the swirls of the milky way
    To be loved and lost

    Not sure I would even use the last part
    Just end it with lost.
    But seriously
    I love this one just wish i could come up
    With a better
    Review to offer you .
    | Posted on 2013-05-14 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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