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    dots Submission Name: i am greydots
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    Author: love_confusion
    ASL Info:    20/f/ct
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 10/53/57
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    dotsi am greydots
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    And I always wondered how all the other girls
    always seemed to shine brighter
    and sparkle like the stars in the night sky.
    They would have a radiant glow, like that of the moon.
    I tried producing some shimmering beauty
    But I've always been dull
    I tried being like the sun, and producing rays of warm light.
    but no matter how hard I tried, my color has always been grey.




    Submitted on 2013-04-05 00:52:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think grey is a beautiful color :) Lovely poem, albeit lonely. Sounds like it could be a very good ending to a story, or a beginning, either way let me know if you add on to it.
    | Posted on 2013-04-06 00:00:00 | by Priestess | [ Reply to This ]


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