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    dots Submission Name: Re: Lovedots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1021
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       I'm lost on this one. I figured I could upload and get some feedback and maybe someone could point me in a good direction. There's so much more than angst here, the story here is so complex. This is to my husband.


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    dotsRe: Lovedots
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    Like the sands, I shift under your weight.
    Just a whisper away, I can hear your voice.
    I am bound to your howling, Moonchild.
    I will listen without choice.

    Goddess born. Strayed.
    Fire consumed. Yet I stay.

    Hidden in a sylvan glory, I wonder if I still exist.
    Lost in these grey forests, the bark pallid in color.
    Charcoal. Silver. Pearl. Blanched.
    I am lost in this wooded mirror.

    Shattered.

    True to form, my love.






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      I find myself wondering if this is a reference to being 'lost in him', rather than 'lost in your own place'. I'm a tad inept in regards to construing personal pieces of text; this being said, I find myself incapable of discerning the negative from the positive energies of this concoction. Because of this, I wouldn't and will not risk making a misconceived critique.
    However, what I will offer is overall praise (might as well take the opportunity to spread some good vibes, right?);
    you transform physical elements into ornaments- these visuals that say more about what you feel than what you see, and I find nothing more inspiring than that. You feed the brain, provide it with lucid imagery, all the while communicating with the reader directly.
    Kudos, fellow writer.
    | Posted on 2015-02-17 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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