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    dots Submission Name: Beneath Bittersweet Bangsdots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBeneath Bittersweet Bangsdots
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    Just imagine that if
    everything that we know
    wasn't real but instead,
    just our minds own show

    to block out what's true,
    block out the actual "real".
    What if existence was fake;
    what if all that we feel

    is a comfort to blind
    us from a living hell?
    Think, if our dreams are what
    keep us in this little shell

    to hide the cruel demons,
    hide realities fangs;
    just keeping us sheltered
    beneath bittersweet bangs

    so we never realize
    what we truly battle.
    We're in a uniform line
    like a trail of cattle

    following pretend fate
    which we are taught to believe
    is the only way in this world,
    the only way to relieve

    from our screaming conscience
    who knows the truth.
    But we're too busy chasing
    after that fountain of youth

    which holds empty promises
    and empty faith;
    assurance of being redeemed
    and coming out unscathed.




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      Your first verse brings to mind some facts I had to learn to fully appreciate. My consciousness constituent (or personality if you will) knows next to nothing about the actual atomic realisms, or even metabolic actualities of my being in context. Sure we understand some of the rules that govern but the human enigma's identity crisis is in possession of no such wristwatch armed 'be here now'. So you might ask, are the conceptions of our mind actually real to us as intrinsically as we like to think they are?? Are we just sheltering ourselves "Beneath bittersweet bangs"?? Then again, of the fecundity of conjugal relations, I like to think they keep me young. It's not pretend fate to think they relieve. I like to romantic fidelity think it's not all empty promises though your probably right we're not going to come out of it unscathed.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-04-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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