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    dots Submission Name: Scorched dots

    Author: raspberry89
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 5/18/22
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsScorched dots

    My arms reach for heaven
    but my feet are firmly rooted in hell
    I'd like to escape the fire
    but i'm not doing well
    My efforts mean nothing
    only suffering will suffice
    I'm stuck here
    in the depths of the night

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