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    dots Submission Name: Ruined dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Rant/I am dead inside
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    dotsRuined dots
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    I am left in the ruins of my life
    Only ashes remain now
    Ruined by the paths I choose to walk
    Slaughtered by the choices I went through went
    Weakened by the people I allowed into my world

    Here I am left within the ruins of my life
    Only a memory of what was existence
    Only what if's and could have been's remain

    Nothing can help out of this hole I find myself in
    I have fallen too hard, I am lost forever...
    Due to my choices and the paths I have chosen
    I am my very own worst enemy ...

    It is me I have to blame for these ashes that represent the life I choose to lead.
    It is me and only me whom is to blame...




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      And with every empire or kingdom that falls there will be someone to come along and take control, so is the case I believe when you get past all the after math. You will not be making those same mistakes going forward. This piece magnifies the aftermath and claims responsibility for loss. It would be awesome to see a follow up piece about rebuilding!
    | Posted on 2013-04-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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