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    dots Submission Name: His Liesdots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHis Liesdots
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    Two forsaken hearts,
    completely dead to love.
    This broken illusion
    was brought by a dove.

    Their tempting sensations
    were denied of feeling.
    This precious torture
    was made for the willing.

    The Mistress of Burden
    with a burning heart
    caught him in his lies,
    then tore him apart.

    Her heart remains destroyed
    with her lonely mind.
    He's weakened her spirit,
    her love is left behind.

    He quickly moves on
    like she didn't mean a thing.
    Their vows were pointless,
    along with their rings.




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      Everyone has had that point in their lives that they have been betrayed by love or someone that they care for. I'm a son and have been thru a nasty divorce and seen what it can do to someone. The deeper you get in touch with your emotions as a writer your work will continually be a masterpiece for anyone who reads your work. Keep it up and you have a gift that so many people wish they had
    | Posted on 2014-10-29 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Bypass Surgery and stick your finger in it, with pen in hand and you have ended it, righteously.
    | Posted on 2013-04-17 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This one hit me kind of close to home, Their vows were pointless, along with there rings.... ouch, I am going through divorce and I really enjoyed this poem, also the ability to rhyme and still keep the emotional content intact is an art. Great job
    | Posted on 2013-04-13 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow very sad, yet very powerful poem. I'm deeply sorry for what you're going through... I send warm thoughts to your mending.
    | Posted on 2013-04-12 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]


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