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    dots Submission Name: Labordots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLabordots
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    sometimes it is good to be transparent
    almost like I can be invisible through my vulnerabilty
    and what is that to me but
    Grace

    my toes search for fertile soil
    that does nothing but wait on the sun




    Submitted on 2013-04-12 11:53:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first two lines were just lovely..like a soft whisper.

    "sometimes it is good to be transparent
    almost like I can be invisible through my vulnerability"- When you put yourself out there, expose, express or whatever..you extend yourself and by being that you become vulnerable..there is a risk that comes with it but there is also a feeling of freedom that comes with it. A feeling of letting go, just letting yourself in..you live and let live...sort of thing.

    "my toes search for fertile soil
    that does nothing but wait on the sun"
    ..having that vulnerability, you're ready to almost anything but you wait..with patience and a calm heart, aware, all- knowing and hopeful..
    ..my thoughts on yours.

    I like how this comes through with a swift of relatedness and simplicity. Thanks for sharing. Great write.
    | Posted on 2013-04-29 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Transpicuous of you my friend. Have fun basking.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-04-12 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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