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    Author: love_confusion
    ASL Info:    20/f/ct
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 10/53/57
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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    Bytes: 750



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    And with each breath I take I feel
    The piercing pain, the ache
    And I wonder if this is all there is to life.
    This pain, this agony I feel inside.

    How I wish I could sleep forever
    I want to remain in my dreams
    Breathing is a constant reminder
    Of the broken bones and broken hearts,
    the silent screams I was forced
    To suffer

    I have written my mistakes across my body
    I hid them well in hopes no one would find them
    But I feel each one sting
    And even when the pain subsides the scars
    Are there to remind me of what I have done
    And the cruelty of this world..

    Not sure if I want to be part of anymore.




    Submitted on 2013-04-12 15:33:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very powerful piece here maybe drop the last
    Line my opion only but I don't think it adds anything
    Also silent scream is a bit cliché sure it fits
    In perfect but if you can come up with something
    More original I think you would have an even stronger
    Work
    | Posted on 2013-04-13 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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