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    dots Submission Name: NaPoMo week 2dots

    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNaPoMo week 2dots

    This is watermark divination of a drying fenceó
    posts lined up perfectly, but drying without a sense of unity.
    Where the sun prefers to shine,
    as the shaman reads,
    its just playing favorites.
    A poem for a friend who thinks too much:
    Just live,
    so you can remember and not yearn.
    Heís the twitchy typeó
    feels like the cells beneath his skin never sleep.
    So what is he really losing when his teeth chew away?
    Maybe somethingÖ
    maybe when he falls and his legs refuse to move,
    heíll have an excuse to lie there
    instead of dragging himself with just his fingernails.

    Canít keep writing the same poem
    about all the times when I forget
    all the reasons I have to be happy

    It stays inside.
    Burning deep holes within the pit of my stomach.
    Itching at the end of my throat,
    screaming at me to let it go;
    to let it become the ugliness itís supposed to be.
    Because after it fills you,
    and escapes you,
    leaving an awful taste in your mouth,
    itís said that you will feel a lot better.
    But yeah I never throw up

    Words didnít have much time for me today

    I like to think about the person who will eventually love me,
    as I take another sip and then another bite.
    I socialize a bit so I donít come off as sad.
    I wonder what sheíll look like,
    what sheíll like about me,
    what Iíll like about her.
    It doesnít taste as bad anymore,
    and I can feel myself getting drunker.
    The sooner the better

    Not asking enough of me.
    I could give the world to you.

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      I think you have enough talent and enthusiasm to write about things more interesting than yourself; but (I always wonder) does anything like that really exist?
    | Posted on 2013-04-15 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like to think about the person who will eventually love me,

    This is my favorite line. Do you realize how much hope it expresses, even with its shadows of self-loathing?

    I know we shouldn't focus on the sad. That being said, you are very good at finding new ways to say things, "about all the times when I forget all the reasons I have to be happy.Ē

    And your poems aren't all the same poem. I've read you. They are all different. There are little nuances to your sadness, your loneliness . . . your unfulfilled desires . . . and each evokes images of a place, a time. . .

    That could be why I find myself still coming back to read you.

    Nice work.

    | Posted on 2013-04-14 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]

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