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    dots Submission Name: A Train To Catchdots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 31/82/75
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsA Train To Catchdots
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    I'm not gonna change myself,
    Cause you walked out that door.
    I'm not gonna get up,
    Cause you wanted more.

    I'm feeling pretty good,
    Lyin' on the train tracks.
    The evil in people,
    Make me wretch.

    I'm sorry girl,
    I've really gotta go.
    I know,
    You'll miss me so.

    But I've got a a train to catch.

    Don't lie to me.
    Don't lie to me.
    Quit kidding yourself.
    Don't lie to me.




    Submitted on 2013-04-16 17:10:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'd rather not
    catch that train
    lubricate the track
    with my brains

    you may mourn me
    little miss, my girl
    but stars realign
    and warm new worlds...

    Just some thoughts derived from your thoughts...
    | Posted on 2013-04-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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