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A Train To Catch


Author: eggshells
ASL Info:    23/M/WA
Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 31 /82 /75
Words: 76
Class/Type: Lyrics /Depressed
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A Train To Catch



I'm not gonna change myself,
Cause you walked out that door.
I'm not gonna get up,
Cause you wanted more.

I'm feeling pretty good,
Lyin' on the train tracks.
The evil in people,
Make me wretch.

I'm sorry girl,
I've really gotta go.
I know,
You'll miss me so.

But I've got a a train to catch.

Don't lie to me.
Don't lie to me.
Quit kidding yourself.
Don't lie to me.




Submitted on 2013-04-16 17:10:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'd rather not
catch that train
lubricate the track
with my brains

you may mourn me
little miss, my girl
but stars realign
and warm new worlds...

Just some thoughts derived from your thoughts...
| Posted on 2013-04-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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