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    Author: crashley
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    Words: 150
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    It swells out like a giant storm, a roaring thunderstorm that brings only the noise and the violent light, but never rain. The base thumps through my car and I drive around high, high up in the clouds. I'm lost in my own head, floating in sticky sweet smoke and cigarette stained fingertips. I place my hand on the roof of my car as the world spins and I try to find my center. Is God listening to my fervent prayers? I inhale another drag and I blink wildly to try to clear my vision. Everything is fuzzy around the edges. I recognize it and when I reach out to touch things it seems as if I'm interacting with a mirage. It feels easier, less harsh than the thick lines and sharp cool of winter, but the danger sweeps through and everything smells like sin. I am very aware.




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      I think I can relate to moments like this -- where I know I'm living in a way that's contrary to the God that I deeply desire assistance or fulfillment from, and yet I don't necessarily want to change anything about the way I act.
    I hope all is well with you and that everything you need to know becomes clear soon.
    | Posted on 2013-04-19 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


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