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    dots Submission Name: look closelydots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotslook closelydots
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    Collect the dust
    sprawled 'round my eyes
    you'll see
    they're not as brown as you think

    Soon
    the mornings will be short
    with me
    and all we can ever have
    are nights of blinking lights
    and my retina will glow
    like a nova-will crash
    on your face to feast your
    nothingness

    you will probably forget me
    the way I clutched at your back
    to never fall in your dream
    how I put eyeliner to define
    my eyes
    so you'll realize..

    they're not as brown as you think..








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    ||| Comments |||
      To me this is saying you never
    really took the time to see me
    and now this is your last chance
    because if you don't see me now
    I will be gone tomorrow and you never
    will know what you could have had
    | Posted on 2013-04-19 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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