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    dots Submission Name: Broken up dots
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    Author: angelagresham19
    ASL Info:    18-Female Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    0.61 - 66/32/42
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsBroken up dots
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    we are broken up, no longer together. You moved away and never came back. I have moved on There apart of me that still love you but there a huge part of my that hate you. You hurt me. Over and Over you hurt me.
    You come back Wondering ~Do you still love me?~ I have moved on and with other guy that loved me.
    We are broken up,no longer can be together.




    Submitted on 2013-04-18 08:19:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I suggest you break some lines here, make those shorter. In that way you can make pauses and create more emphasis. This needs more structure though I'm not quite sure what you're looking for in terms of feedback.

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    | Posted on 2013-04-18 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]


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