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    dots Submission Name: Sorry...dots
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    Author: angelagresham19
    ASL Info:    18-Female Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    0.61 - 66/32/42
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 519
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 468



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       I think i need a little bit of a writing advice thank you


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    dotsSorry...dots
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    All I can say is i'm sorry.

    I'm sorry with each line of blood I draw on my smooth white skin.

    Im sorry that I am Here.

    I am sorry for not being perfect for you.

    I am sorry for the pain I am about to cause for all of you.

    Maybe this is a wake up call for you.

    I'm sorry Because I'm never worth it to you.

    Im sorry, I did try...




    Submitted on 2013-04-18 09:09:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can truly relate to this..very emotional..sorry I can't really give any constructive advice coz I'm not really good but keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2013-04-24 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]


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