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    dots Submission Name: vigor.dots

    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    i saw the storm
    outside, trapped behind
    somewhat clear inventions

    felt the demon
    in my back, shiver like post-traumatic absence-of-you
    bargaining with the wind

    god showed up
    set like a stone, unbent by the elements
    rubbing scarred wrists like unlucky rabbit’s foot

    i met him
    half way, between tourniquet and noose
    holy ghost-shot eyes

    and i screamed out
    in a whisper, frequencies carved for afterlife ears
    “is this what you wanted or is this what you feared?”

    Submitted on 2013-04-18 13:03:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very creative but I found this kind of confusing..I had to reread it and really think about what some of your phrases meant. I like where you are going with this though :) thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2013-04-22 00:00:00 | by raspberry89 | [ Reply to This ]
      and God said
    "scream at the image in the glass -

    he makes his own visions
    come to pass"

    Just some thoughts embedded in the quarry of your thoughts. If God is as omniscient as we believe, then nothing should surprise Him, not even the weariness that comes with humanity's questionable choices. It's probably more likely that His eyes are tinged with infinite sadness...

    Nice imagery, btw.
    | Posted on 2013-04-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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